The graph below show the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007
The line graph depicts the
intake
of 3 spreads in a period of 26 years, between 1982 and 2007. Overall
, while
low fat
and reduced spreads Add a hyphen
low-fat
shows
an upward trend during the period, Margarine and butter show a declining trend.
The consumption of Correct subject-verb agreement
show
low fat
and reduced spreads started at approximately 10 Add a hyphen
low-fat
grams
in 1996 which was the lowest intake
compared to margarine and butter. However
, it soared at
80 Change preposition
to
grams
in 5 years time before sligtly
decline Correct your spelling
slightly
at
just over 70 Change preposition
to
grams
in 2007.
On the other hand
, Margarine used to be the most favorite spread which
Correct your spelling
with
intake
was
just above 10 Unnecessary verb
apply
grams
in 1981. It then
reached its highest intake
in 1986 before declined
significantly years after and the Wrong verb form
declining
intake
was above 50 grams
in 2007. Meanwhile, the butter intake
also
started relatively high at almost 100 grams
in 1981. However
, it experience
fluctuation over the period and Wrong verb form
experienced
decline
to the point of 40 Wrong verb form
declined
grams
in 2007.Submitted by NA
on
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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