The diagram shows how apple is canned. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
A glance at the diagram provided the process of canning
apples
which is from hand picking to despatch.
Overall
, there are 14 steps.In the beginning, it commences with hand picking and the following steps are transporting, washing, the quality check, cold storing, weighing , peeling, corning, canning,sealing, cooking, labelling, storage and ends with despatch.
According to
the information shown in the diagram, the picked apples
will be transported to be washed before the quality inspection. There will be a cold storing procedure for the qualified apples
. Afterwards, they will be graded before being peeled. Moreover
, the peeled apples
will be sliced in order to be canned.Those containers will be sealed and cooked for sterilization.When the sterilizing procedure is completed, the containers will be labeled
and put into the storage area.Change the spelling
labelled
Finally
, they will be despatched.
To sum up
, it can be apparently seen that there is a lot of work before the despatch of canned apples
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