The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate three places
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where
that
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where
people
live for Correct article usage
apply
the
those Correct article usage
apply
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who were
were
born in Australia and outside of it. The proportion of Correct pronoun usage
who were
people
live
in Wrong verb form
living
cities
, Towns
and Rural areas
has changed over a 15 years
period of time.
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15-year
Overall
, a large number of people
live
in Wrong verb form
lived
cities
and increased during the period, while
over time people
immigrated from rural areas
to cities
and towns
.
As can be seen in the charts at the start of the period, nearly half of people
who Add an article
the people
born
in Australia live in Add a missing verb
were born
cities
and
30 Correct word choice
apply
percent
of them live in Change the spelling
per cent
countryside
and Add an article
the countryside
other
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the other
remaind of
20 Correct your spelling
remaining
percent
are town Change the spelling
per cent
dewellers
. These Correct your spelling
dwellers
figure
have similar trends for those who Change the determiner
figures
born
outside Add a missing verb
were born
the
Australia with 60 Correct article usage
apply
percent
of city residents and 40 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
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per cent
or
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of
who
live in rural Correct pronoun usage
those who
areas
. In 2010, people
immigrated from rural areas
and towns
to cities
which increased city residents for austrialian
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Australian
people
to just under 65 percent
. Australian Change the spelling
per cent
people
who live in countryside
and tows are equal with nearly 20 Correct article usage
the countryside
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
share
. A significant Correct article usage
the share
proportan
of Non-Australian Correct your spelling
proportion
people
are living in cities
with 80 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
population
. It seems rural Add an article
the population
areas
are not a popular place for living among Non-Australian people
as its
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it
accounted
for under 5 Wrong verb form
accounts
percent
only and 10 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
people
lives
in Correct subject-verb agreement
live
towns
.
In conclusion, Most people
have immigrated to cities
and it seems they migrated from other places to cities
for many reasons like good job prospects and facelities
.Correct your spelling
facilities
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cities, towns, areas, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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