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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Staying abroad and communicating using
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 would become vital obstacles for social and practical aspects.
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 essay completely agrees with the statement because social and practical
problems
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 are influenced by the place where we are staying and the
language
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 we use. Social
problems
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 are related to daily activity and
part
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are part
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 of building connections with other humans.
Naturally
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Naturally,
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 people will find a way to interact with others on a daily basis. It’s a benefit if we are familiar with the
language
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, so we can deliver our message
easier
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.
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, people are capable of building connections by having advanced
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 skills.
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, one Individual who
lived
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 in England is facing trouble talking with
the
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a
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neighbor
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due to
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language
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the language
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 barrier and it is difficult to build a relationship.
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Moreover
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 there are practical
problems
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 that will be impacted on organization and work life. Humans usually rely on others when they are staying in new areas, they need other people's support. That means the community is crucial. Unfortunately, our work environment in foreign countries
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 depends on how good our presentation and talking with clients is in using proper
language
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. As an example, our work environment abroad will be lightened up with great bonding through good communication. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 I personally agree that social and practical
problems
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 can be impacted by the environment where we live and the
language
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 that we utilize. Evidently, the more we adapt, the easier it is for us to reduce our
problems
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 in daily life, build up connections,
socialize
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and socialize
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 in community and working areas.

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task achievement
Make sure to directly address the task statement in your introduction to clearly convey your stance on the topic. While your essay does agree with the statement, a more direct and forceful expression of your agreement, along with briefly mentioning the reasons, will fortify your task response.
task achievement
In developing your main points, try to use more detailed and specific examples to support your claims. The examples given are somewhat generic. Adding real-life instances, statistics, or studies could make your arguments stronger and more compelling.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, work on transitioning more smoothly between ideas and paragraphs. Using a variety of linking words and phrases can enhance the flow of your essay. Also, ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea that is developed and supported throughout.
coherence cohesion
Always strive to conclude your essay by summarizing the main arguments presented and restating your stance. The conclusion should reflect back on the essay content and clearly signify closure to the reader.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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