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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people’s reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that the use of computers and telephones for communication is increasing in the world. Some people think that it has a negative effect on young people. I disagree because we learn useful information and new words from them. I believe that youth literacy can be improved through telephone and computer technology. Because they have different types of websites that can provide valuable information for readers. In conclusion, if young people use computers and phones, gadgets will have a more beneficial effect on them. Muhammad
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear and logical structure. Start with an introduction that presents the topic and your stance. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and be linked to the overall argument.
Task Achievement
Develop your arguments with examples and explanations. While you’ve made general statements, expanding them with specific examples or detailed reasoning would strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on your introduction and conclusion. Clearly introduce the topic and your position in the beginning, and provide a concise summary of your argument in the conclusion to clearly communicate your viewpoint to the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
For a higher score in coherence and cohesion, improve the linking between paragraphs and within paragraphs. Use a variety of sentence structures and transitional phrases to demonstrate the relationships between your ideas.
Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, make sure to address all parts of the prompt. Discuss both the potential negative impacts and your reasons for disagreement in depth, providing a balanced and comprehensive response.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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