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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates
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what
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British unemployed people
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 their time
last
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 year. On the whole, we can see that there are differences between
male
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 and
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, but both were more productive in the morning. One of the most noticeable
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 in the morning is that
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 rate of doing housework was higher than
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. Specifically, it was recorded at 49% in women and only 19% in men.
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, the rate of
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 was 7 times higher than
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 in doing gardening in the morning. About
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, there
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not
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 significant differences. In the evening, people doing housework
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declined to
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7% in
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 and 21% in
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.
On the other hand
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, there was an increase in people watching TV
in
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both
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 and
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. The proportion was only
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4% in
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males
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 and 2% in
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 in the morning, but in the evening, there
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 14% and 12% respectively.

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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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