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You use public trasnport and have been facing issues. Write a letter to the public transport autoroties. In your letter include: why public transport is important to you what problem you face suggest what can be done to improve public transport

#trasnport #transport #autoroties #face
Dear Sir , I am writing
this
 letter to express my deep grievances
on
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about
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 the service that was provided by the government in the form of
the
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public transportation. I am a
middle class
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 person and I travel a lot
through
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by
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buses
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bus
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 and
trains
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 because it is a cheap source of transportation which suits me
hence
, I can save ample money simultaneously,
it
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 became easy to commute.
Moreover
, I feel safe
in
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 the bus
due to
 the presence of people around me
hence
, I empathize
to use
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 it on
the
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a
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 daily basis. Yesterday, I had a crucial meeting at my office which
also
 decided my promotion
thus
 , I was patiently waiting for the bus to reach
at
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my workplace
however
 , the bus was late for 4 hours and I was unable to attend that meeting
as a result
, someone else got that opportunity . When I asked the reason
from
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driver
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the driver
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of
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 being late , he insulted and ignored me . I did lots of hard work to flourish in
the
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a
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 multinational company. I request you to provide
a
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proper coaching to the driver which will help him to show some work
ethics
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ethic
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 and professionalism. The government
arrange
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the
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a
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 great transportation network for the welfare of the public if , people like him
show
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showed
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aggressive
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an aggressive
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 attitude
then
 , the common man
feel
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 dissatisfied and disappointed. I strongly assert that
this
 issue must be addressed at the earliest. Yours faithfully, Jai
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Formality in opening and closing
Begin by addressing the recipient more formally, with titles (e.g., "Dear Public Transport Authority"), and ensure the conclusion is also formally closed ("Yours sincerely,"). This will enhance the professionalism of your letter.
Single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea - while you have done this well, expanding each idea with more support or examples could strengthen your argument.
Complete response with solutions
When explaining the issues you face, clearly outline the impact on you and suggest more specific improvements or solutions that could address these issues.
Logical structure
Work on improving the letter's logical structure by connecting ideas more smoothly between paragraphs. Use transitional phrases to guide the reader through your argument coherently.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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