The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.
The image demonstrates the Museum located at Hartford Street in 1957 and how it was reconstructed by 2007, with all the changes throughout the given period in 50 years.
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, it is noticeable that the building almost doubled in sizeLinking Words
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and a lot of new activities opened. Remove the comma
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, a garden took place all around the facility back in 1957, Linking Words
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in 2007 garden was placed at a small corner in the back yard of the Museum, all other place was given for the parking lot.
It is interesting to note that, previously the museum consisted of three rooms, Linking Words
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in 2007 that number doubled. The local history room increased and became the centre of a building that connected all other galleries. Linking Words
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opened a shop and cafe for customer comfort.
It is important to mention that in 1957 outside parks were more diverse with plenty of different trees. Linking Words
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, most of them were cut to build a car park in front of the building.Linking Words
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