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The graph below show the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007

The graph below show the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007
#show #consumption
The diagram illustrates the assumption of several spreads between 1981 and 2007. Regarding the
Margarine
, It started just under 100 grams and after
the
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 short period of reduction, it began increasing,
In addition
,
Margarine's
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the Margarine's
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 graph was constant
in
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for
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 a short period but right after that it started to decrease. In regard
the
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 Butter, it began right above 140 grams and with lots of fluctuations, it ended up at
much
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a much
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 lower value
its
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than its
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intial
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initial
 value.
Last
 but not least, there is no data given for Low fat before 1996 but it increased gradually from 1996 to 2007.
Consequently
, Butter had
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apply
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the
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first place at the
begining
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beginning
 but it was in the middle position
at the end
.
Altough
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Although margarine
Margarine
 had a large amount of fluctuation, it was
significant
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a significant
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 deduction to its
overall
 value and it held the
last
 place in 2007. Since there was no information given for the Low fat before 1996, I am unable to see what place it could have had.
Furthermore
, the only graph
which
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in which
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 it was steady at some point
it
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was
Margarine
 between 1991 and 1996.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words margarine with synonyms.
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