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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002
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The given column graph illustrates the total number of
minutes
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 (in billions) of phone calls in the United Kingdom, including local
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 calls, National and international
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 calls, and mobile calls between 1995 and 2002.
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, the proportion of local fixed calls ranked first throughout the whole time frame.
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, over the given period, both mobile calls and national/ international
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 gradually grew. Throughout
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 time, the total
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 of mobile calls and National and International calls followed a similar pattern to each other, which the former ranged from nearly 2
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 and almost two fifth
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, and the latter started the point at 35
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 and finished at three fifth. Gradually, the total number of
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 of local calls experienced a consistent trend, so that that of local calls rose from a large proportion of
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 in 1995 to 90
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 in 1999, after which these calls decreased slightly year-on-year until they ended the period at around the same initial value – 70
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minutes
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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