İn some countries ,a few people eran extremely high salaries.Some people think that this is good for a country,while others believe that the goverment should control and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both two views and give your opinion.

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a country, and other
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money, they will buy more, and
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the power of
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better with a steady income.
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have enough money to
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the family issues around
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became
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less than before a one year.
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income
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people
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argue that
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distribution of nations should have
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three
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poor, middle state, and rich. To illustrate more, if
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people
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are
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the same level,
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not be
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human activity between
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as rich
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poorest
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a high
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salaries
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cused
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cause
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, both
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view
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their opinions. personally, l agree with the first
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opinion
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who believe
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satisfied
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income inequality
  • economic disparity
  • government intervention
  • progressive tax system
  • societal divide
  • income caps
  • economic growth
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • public services
  • cohesive society
  • talent attraction
  • lucrative sectors
  • wealth accumulation
  • tax contributions
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