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The table below highlights data on the number of travelers using three major German airports between 2007 and 2012

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The given table illustrates data regarding how many visitors utilized three main
airport
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airports
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 in
Germania
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Germany
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 from 2007 and 2012.Units are measured in
millions
.
Overall
,what stands out from the graph is that Frankfurt was the most used airport by tourists during the whole period,except in 2009. Looking into detail,in 2007,Dusseldorf and Frankfurt were the most used airports by travellers with 27.2 and 36.5
millions
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 respectively.The figure
fot
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for
 the former showed an upward trend until 2009 and overtook that for the
latter.İn
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latter for
 the next two years,it was observed an unexpected decline in the number of visitors who went to the Dusseldorf airport(37,1 and 33,2
millions
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 respectively).Despite
this
,it recovered and increased again and set second place with 45.6 m in 2012.Meanwhile,The figure for
latter
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 rose gradually during the entire period and stood at 69.3 m in 2012. With regard to the Berlin Tegel,in 2007,the number of people who
visit
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 there was the least(17.3
millions
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)
.İn
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In
 the subsequent 3 years,it grew considerably,following which levelled off and stood at 43.3
millions
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 in 2012.
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