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The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in 1957 and 2007.

The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in 1957 and 2007.
The maps show how the local
museum
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 located at the northeast corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street was developed between 1957 and 2007.
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, it can clearly be seen that the building of the local
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has
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transform
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transformed
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 from a small
museum
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 became a larger building in 2007.
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However
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 the trees around the construction decreased throughout the period of time. In terms of the building prior to the development, the local
museum
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 had 4 rooms. The first one was an entrance hall situated in the centre of the
museum
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. Next to it, there
were
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 a
museum
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 store
room
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in
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on
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 the east
side
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,
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 and a local history
room
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in
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on
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 the west
side
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.
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, the old building had a national exhibition
room
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as
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the biggest
rooom
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room
 in the
museum
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, which
found
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in
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on
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 the north
side
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 of the building. Regarding the changes
of
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to
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 the
museum
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, the construction had 5 rooms.
In
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On
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 the east
side
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 of the
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museum
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museum,
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 there was a
museum
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 shop which functioned as an entrance for visitors. The second
room
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 was a reception which
being
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 one with a local history
room
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.
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, there was a cafe
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in
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on
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 the southeast
side
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 of the
museum
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. Across from the reception, there was a special exhibition
room
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.
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, there was an education centre
room
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 next to it. Not
forget
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to mention, the local
museum
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 in 2007
also
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 had a car park in front of the building.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, room, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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