The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.
The table indicates data about 6 different cities and their opening years, the number of kilometres of
route
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the route
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and
turists
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tourists
per year they accept. From an
overall
perspective,
London
is the oldest city among the group and came top of
to
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the list with
highest
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the highest
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number of kilometres of
route
,
while
Tokyo
has the most passengers per year. Regarding the category of
opened
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the opened
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day,
while
London
is the oldest city(1863),Paris,
Tokyo
,Washington,
Kyoto
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and Kyoto
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opened in
20th
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the 20th
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century and L.A is the youngest city that opened in 2001. In terms of km of
route
,
London
come
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first with 394 km
whereas
Paris,
Tokyo
,
Washington
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and Washington
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are 199,155 and 126, respectively. Kyoto and L.A has
less
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fewer
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route
km with 11 and 28. In reference to passengers per year, Paris and
Tokyo
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turists
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tourists
among
group
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the group
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with 1191 and 1927 million
and
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apply
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followed by
London
(775)
while
Washington
accepting
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144 million . Kyoto and L.
A guesting
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Guesting
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45 and 50 million passengers, respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words route, london, tokyo with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railway
  • kilometers of route
  • passengers per year
  • extensive network
  • age of the system
  • analyze
  • correlation
  • outliers
  • notable comparisons
  • trends
  • commuter volume
  • inauguration date
  • modernization
  • historic
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • operate
  • transportation hub
  • utilization
  • frequency of service
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