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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. -write a letter to the company. In your letter •Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sport team •Summaries the benefits of paying for the concerts •Say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir, I
informed
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 by my friend that your company want to
support
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children 's
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a children 's
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 sports
team
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 or
support
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 two concerts in
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the open-air
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open-air
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open air
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. At
first,
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I
so
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 excited to hear
this
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 news and I wish the best for your
team
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 in
this
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 way. T first you should search on many
school
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schools
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 and
chose
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 the best
team
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 to
support
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 . In fact, when you
sponser
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sponsor
 children's
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team
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teams
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 you boost the
confident
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 between them and foster
good
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a good
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 generation for the future. On one hand, you can
make
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 attention indirectly to your company. But, paying for concerts is more
differnt
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different
 from sport.
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, you can invest
on
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 culture and be seen by more people than ever. Namely, you
support
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 two bands they become popular in
the
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apply
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society,
that is
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 the
besst
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best
 way
be
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 known in any place. I am so proud
to
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of
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 myself because of
soft-hearted
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the soft-hearted
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 man in
this
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 company
and
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who
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 wants to help society . best wishes amir

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logical structure
Ensure a clear structure in your letter that includes an introduction, body paragraphs each dedicated to a specific aspect of the topic, and a conclusion. Maintain logical flow between ideas.
greeting and closing
Use appropriate greetings at the start and polite closings at the end of your letter, adjusting based on the formality of the letter. In your case, consider a more formal salutation and closing.
single idea per paragraph
To improve coherence, use transitional phrases to connect sentences and paragraphs. This helps in guiding the reader smoothly from one point to the next.
complete response
To fully respond to the task, make sure to address all parts of the prompt significantly. Include detailed reasons for your recommendations and expand on the benefits of each option.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout your letter. Given the formal nature of the task, avoid colloquial language and strive for a balance between formal and engaging.
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