The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2011 and 2021.

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The given bar chart represents the differences between the popularity of well-known

Instagram

accounts in 2011 and 2021.

Overall

, in 2018 Selena Gomez had the highest number of

followers

Instagram

However

, in 2018 Cristiano Ronaldo and The Rock had not much

funs

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fun

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on social media. Meanwhile, in 2018 Ariana Grande was more popular on

Instagram

than Kylie Jenner. According to the information in

2018

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2018,

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Selena Gomez had 130

million

followers

on her page, at the same time Cristiano Ronaldo had 110

million

followers

Instagram

Nonetheless

, in 2021 Cristiano

Ronaldos

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Ronaldo's

Ronaldos'

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subscribers went up 300

million

Instagram

. At one time Selene Gomez’s

followers

rose

only

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to only

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240

million

Instagram

. Ariana Grande had 120

million

followers

Instagram

in 2018.

Difference

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The difference

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between The Rock and Kylie Jenner had 10

million

followers

in 2018.

However

, in 2021 they had the same

followers

Instagram

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