The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2011 and 2021.

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The given bar chart represents the differences between the popularity of well-known

Instagram

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accounts in 2011 and 2021.

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, in 2018 Selena Gomez had the highest number of

followers

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Instagram

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, in 2018 Cristiano Ronaldo and The Rock had not much

funs

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on social media. Meanwhile, in 2018 Ariana Grande was more popular on

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than Kylie Jenner. According to the information in

2018

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2018,

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Selena Gomez had 130

million

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followers

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on her page, at the same time Cristiano Ronaldo had 110

million

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followers

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Instagram

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, in 2021 Cristiano

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Ronaldo's

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subscribers went up 300

million

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Instagram

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. At one time Selene Gomez’s

followers

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rose

only

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240

million

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Instagram

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. Ariana Grande had 120

million

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followers

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Instagram

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in 2018.

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between The Rock and Kylie Jenner had 10

million

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followers

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in 2018.

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, in 2021 they had the same

followers

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Instagram

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words instagram, followers, million with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

143 words

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The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2011 and 2021.

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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

“Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

Some people believe tertiary education should be free, but others say universities should charge students. Discuss both this views and give your opinion.

The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?