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The diagram below shows how solar panels can be used to provide electricity for domestic use. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how solar panels can be used to provide electricity for domestic use. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture depicts that domestic
electricity
 provider
that
is used
Wrong verb form
uses
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 solar energy.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 solar panels absorb energy from the sun and produce
electricity
 by using
inverter
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inverters
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, electrical
panel
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panels
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,
utility
melter
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melters
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,
utility
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and utility
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grid
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grids
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. The solar
panel
 is located on top of the house and Inverter and
Utility
 meter are presented on the wall.
Firstly
, Sun ray is absorbed by solar panels and
it
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they
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transfers
Correct subject-verb agreement
transfer
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 into DC current, which
converts
Wrong verb form
is converted
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 into AC current by Interver and it monitors the
electricity
 and production. The
electricity
 is distributed to
house
Add an article
the house
a house
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 by
Electrical
Correct article usage
an Electrical
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panel
 which is presented on the wall.
Secondly
, extra solar
electricity
 can be collected in the
Utility
 grid and it will turn back through the
Utility
 Meter. When the
electricity
 produced by solar
panel
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panels
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 run out or during the
night time
Correct your spelling
nighttime
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, the
Utility
 Grid will provide
electricity
to
Change preposition
for
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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domestic
usage
Replace the word
users
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. It is
hanged
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hung
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 on the wall which is presented next to the Inverter box.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, panel, utility with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • solar panels
  • electricity
  • domestic use
  • renewable energy
  • photovoltaic cells
  • sunlight
  • generate
  • store
  • inverter
  • power grid
  • environmentally friendly
  • efficient
  • cost-effective
  • sustainable
  • reliable
  • alternative
  • traditional
  • fossil fuels
  • nuclear energy
  • emissions
  • solar energy
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • reduces
  • dependency
  • conclusion
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