The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map describes a plan of development of
a
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industrial area in Norbiton. It is noticeable that more facilities and housings will be built in the
futher
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future
,
while
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the number of
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the factory
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factory
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will see a decrease. Looking into more details, there will be two more extra branched
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out the round road. One
lead
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to 2 housing areas,
the
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and the
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other one
lead
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to a bridge across the river
has
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a housing area along the way, which
end
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at a housing area.
One
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the same side, there will still
have
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a
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farmland, but occupied a smaller space
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to now. What is
also
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worth noticing is that more facilities
of
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living will be supplied in the
futher
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future
further
,
for example
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, there will be shops
at
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the west side of the larger round road,
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the medical centre, playground and school will be
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the east side of it.
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, there will be three housing areas surrounded by these three facilities
instead
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of factories currently.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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