The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The two diagrams indicate a Grange
Park
layout and how it has changed between 1920 and the current day.
Overall
, it is readily apparent that the
park
has undergone several changes
along with
improvements to facilities for the neighbourhood which include the construction of a new playground and a car
park
Before the development, the layout of the public
park
seems very simple.
Firstly
, the most noticeable feature of the
park
is the fountain, which is located centre of the
park
and there is a stage for musicians next to the fountain.
In addition
, there are three Rose gardens near both sides of the entrances.
Furthermore
, there was a greenhouse near Eldon Street. By looking at the second diagram,
it is clear that
the current
park
layout has been completely redesigned. First and foremost, a huge rose garden is located in the middle of the
park
and seats surround the garden.
Also
, a playground for children and a cafe are added next to the entrance adjoining Arnold Avenue.
Last
but not least, the stage is changed to an amphitheatre for concerts at the same site and a car
park
entrance near the water feature .
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