These days, in many counties fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved?

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It is believed that there is a shortage of secondary
school
teachers
in numerous nations as the less number of candidates are interested
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tutors in these schools. A number of factors are responsible for the aforementioned phenomenon.
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to discuss the same
along with
effective measures to tackle it in the subsequent paragraphs. Diverse points endorse the causes for
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issue. The principal among all is the unpleasant behaviour of the senior students towards their educators. Since the governments have introduced the policy that tutors cannot scold their students, the cases of
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teachers
'
assualt
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assault
have climbed significantly.
For instance
, one video went viral online where higher
school
students were seen beating their science master because he
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did not
didn't
pass them in the exam.
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,
this
disrespectful behaviour of teenagers
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created havoc among educators to not join senior secondary schools. As every cloud has a silver lining,
this
predicament can be resolved by taking some plausible steps. Primarily, parents should teach their children the important value of respecting others. It is evident that home is the first
school
of a child where basic lessons
such
as talking and behaviours are learnt,
consequently
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the
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responsibility
of parents and elders to take out some time on
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basis so that children can learn through imitation, the moral ethics and behaviours to live in the society.
Besides
this
, strict laws should be imposed against the juvenile offenders. If any of the culprits would get strict punishment,
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of the youngsters will think twice before hitting their trainers.
Thus
, not only the family's attention towards their kin
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but
also
the imposition of rigid laws against young criminals can bring back
teachers
to
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secondary schools.
To conclude
, it can be inferred that no doubt,
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attitude of trainees towards their lecturers has stopped them
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secondary
school
teachers
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.
However
, the necessary attention of the parents and caregivers
along with
stringent actions against wrongdoers can solve the problem to a great extent.
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