Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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depends on different views of

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some might attribute it to devotion and determination, I believe that other factors

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as money and good-looking play vital roles. On one hand,

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who want to be successful often work very hard and always aim high. It is evident that

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nowadays are evaluated via their education levels, students who want to achieve high qualifications and more accomplishments need to be more industrious and make an attempt to attain

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goals.

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succeed, there are other elements doomed to failure.

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, other factors are

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the main roles that contribute to one’s career. A financial background is appealing and it can be a great connection with job opportunities.

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, a good gleaming appearance can influence the first impression, leading to the chances of progressing in career and priority in some situations

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as job interviews. The best example of

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partners always find

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the company.

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, I believe that

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being conscientious and persevering, financial background and appearance are significant components of success.