Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Whether industriousness and persistence or material wealth and physical appearance play an important role in a person’s

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is a highly controversial discussion.

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the writer acknowledges the essence of the latter forms, diligence and persistence are far more significant. Prosperities and outlooking can aid individuals

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accomplishments in several ways. For those who

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affluent families, setting up a business can be done without struggling with

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mortgage or finding a secure job will be easier since they have a good foundation from the beginning. Regarding appearance, people who are considered attractive can easily be prioritized when getting

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or applying to certain positions relating to fashion,

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and entertainment

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. Indeed, a singer who is beautiful can draw much attention from audiences in a show

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to others regardless of talent or voice. These two factors can be huge advantages

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some people since they were born, providing greater opportunities to achieve goals and climb the social ladder. No matter how easily can reach their targets when possessing money and good

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, individuals who train themselves to become industrious and determined can go a

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path and gain achievements. In fact,

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many are fortunate to

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themselves in prosperous backgrounds and attractive

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, others who are not lucky always find

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a way to attain accomplishments, often

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putting

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great deal of effort.

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, Nick Vujicic, who was born with or limbs, has

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himself

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to practice writing by mouth and gain a

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degree with two majors. Not only that, he inspired the youth with a role model of being persistent and became a motivational speaker. The other reason is that major

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seldom comes easily without perseverance. Some may

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on numerous billionaires who inherit a fortune from their families and become successful, but they ignore the importance of

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hard work

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and determination that help the rich people keep developing their companies and maintain their

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. In brief,

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money and outlooking significantly

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to the

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of individuals, the role of diligence and determination is considered far more crucial for

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long-term development.