The graph below shows the cosumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in European countru 1979 and 2004

The graph below shows the cosumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in European countru 1979 and 2004
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The provided line graph depicts the
consumption
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of fish,
beef
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, lamb, and
chicken
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in Europe from 1979 to 2004. They measured the value in grams per person per week. In general, there was a downward
trend
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for lamb and
beef
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during the period,
while
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chicken
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tended to gradually increase, and fish did not denote any significant alteration. Looking more in detail, there was a
trend
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of
chicken
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showing an upward
trend
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as it started
as
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in
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the third position in 1979 and
then
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arose
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rose
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up, which placed it in second
place
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in 1984.
Furthermore
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, from 1989 to 1994,
beef
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was replaced as the first
place
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of
consumption
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until 2004.
On the other hand
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,
chicken
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, which had
a
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apply
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first
place
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in 1979, started to jump down in 1989, eventually still in
the
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apply
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second
place
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of
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in
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consumption
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.   Similar to
beef
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, lamb had a
decline
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declining
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trend
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starting
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apply
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.
Firstly
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, meat was placed in the second position for food
consumption
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.
However
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,
range
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the range
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from 1979 to 1984 started being replaced with
chicken
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and
drop
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dropped
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slightly until 2004 as the third
place
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of most food consumed by
public
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the public
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.
However
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, fish, which were in the
least
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lowest
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position, fluctuated slowly with
sharp
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a sharp
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movement from 1979 to 2004.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, beef, chicken, trend, place with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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