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The graph shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.

The graph shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.
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The given line graph illustrates the food ingestion alteration of
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the chinese
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chinese
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Chinese
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 population in six different years with the 5 years interval, starting from 1985. The types of
product
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products
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 are divided
in to
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meat
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,
salt
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, and
fish
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the most
comsumed
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consumed
 product over the period was
fish
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.
While
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salt
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 experienced downward trends,
meat
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's popularity
was
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gradually increased to meet
at
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the same figure
at the end
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 of the period provided. In 1985,
Fish
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consuming
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consumption
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 started at the highest point compared to
salt
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 and
fish
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, with 600 grams per person per week. After that, it experienced
the
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a
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 fluctuation
during
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from
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 1990 to 2000
then
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continue
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continued
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 to sharply rose to
the
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its
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 highest point at
appoximately
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approximately
 850, in 2010. Moving on to the consumption of
salt
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, It is obvious that
chinese
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Chinese
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 citizens fond
in
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of
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salt
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 started higher than
meat
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 at about 500 and 100, respectively.
While
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salt
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 showed
dramatic
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a dramatic
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decreased
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decrease
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meat
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are
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moderately rose to meet
at
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the same amount, at roughly 200 grams.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meat, salt, fish with synonyms.
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