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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal berween 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal berween 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
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 graph illustrates the average Carbon dioxide emissions by an individual person in various European countries for about 40 years time
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,the UK and
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 graphs are downtrend,
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 Italy and Portugal graphs are uptrend. In 1967,the United Kingdom was the highest CO2 emission country at almost 11 metric
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 and
Sweden
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 was the second highest on the list at around 9 metric
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,which was double that of Italy(over 4 metric
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) and fourth times bigger than Portugal.The UK carbon emission decreased gradually and ended up at nearly 9 metric
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Sweden
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's graph decreased dramatically and closed under 6 metric
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,Italy's trend
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 increased steadily over the
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 of time and finished at almost 8 metric
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,which was nearly double than starting point.
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,Italy finished the
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 in the second
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.Portugal started the journey with the lowest point among the countries,but gradually increased
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 ended the journey near about 6 metric
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Sweden
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's
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