The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, between 2000 and 2010. Summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph depicts information about the annual revenues of three bakeries between 2000 and 2010. In general, Amandine
Bakery
and Bolo Cakery had an upward trend through
time, starting from their lowest amount and reaching their highest point in 2010. Change preposition
over
Nevertheless
, Mari Bakeshop highlighted a gradual decrease until its minimal value in 2010.
In detail, Mari Bakeshop began from roughly 80000 dollars
per year, followed by fluctuactions
until 2004 when the incomes decreased steadily. Correct your spelling
fluctuations
Besides
, in 2007, this
bakery
had a recovery showing earnings of 60000 dollars
, however
its values fell a second time. Add a comma
however,
On the other hand
, Amandine Bakery
remained constast
with earnings of just below 60000 Correct your spelling
constant
contrast
dollars
. Finally
, Bolo Cakery was the bakery
that started with the lowest income estimated in
20000 Change preposition
at
dollars
, followed by some variations between 2001 and 2003. Then
, its values were stable until 2006, and indeed, revenues reached values of just above 60000 dollars
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