Any attempt to preserve the natural world will hinder economic development. However, the benefits of helping the environment will always far outweigh the disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree?

The merits of protecting
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environment
boosts
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industries which definitely
values
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more than
its
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demerits.
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, there is an opposition who thinks vice versa. I absolutely agree with the first mindset.
While
there are some arguments in
favor
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of blocking the financial systems by environmental
protecting
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acts, it is worth considering the potential harms
such
actions could impose on essential services and everyday people's life.
For example
, increasing the cost of energy in order to minimize its consumption, can put
pressur
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pressure
on low-income families to do their fundamental daily activities
such
as keeping their home temperature at
a
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appropriate level.
However
, a strong sustainable environmental managing approach, not only can eliminate
this
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life threatening
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and worrying side effects of
eccofriendly
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eco-friendly
ecofriendly
policie
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policies
police
policy
,
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but has its own benefits which are worth time, money and any
efforts
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spending
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on their
developments
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development
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. On the other side,the existence of absolute positive impacts of environmentally friendly practices on industry is undeniably true.
This
means that by taking any protective measures to prevent pollution and contaminating the natural resources, we are in fact
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the cash cows which are the moving power for any industrial field. Water reservoirs
is
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revealed to give an example, which can be used as
renewable
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source of energy to produce electricity.
Additionally
can be supplied as drinkable water.
Moreover
, by less
consuming
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of these resources
such
as water, oil, and other resources we can save the natural capital
of
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being wasted on importing them and later
this
saved
cashflow
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cash flow
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which can be invested
on
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other segment
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another segment
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of
economy
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the economy
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including ecotourism, which is one of the most proven political plans to foster the national and global economies. In
coclusion
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conclusion
,
by
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detecting and running supportive
economical
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economic
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programs, performing and investing
on
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in
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protectional
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protection
activities on nature and raw materials
,
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can
finally
strengthen the
manetary
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monetary
systems
in addition
to
maintain
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the planet safe and clean for its present and future inhabitants.
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