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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at a line graph provided reveals the exported proportion from Australia to four nations namely
Japan
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, The US, China and India counted by percent, from 1990 to 2012.
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 there is a recessive growth pattern witnessed by those of
Japan
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 and the US, which observed a negative relation compared to the two other ones. In terms of
Japan
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's imported number which is the highest figure at
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initial with about 25 which is
also
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 its peak, followed by the vigorous deterioration to around 18
at
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 2005 before experiencing a marginal fluctuation
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 the next few years and ending with approximately 19 at 2012. As for those of the US, launching at more than 10
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 2005, the data experienced a slowly erratic trend in the next 10 years before
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 away to in the vicinity of 5
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 2012. Regarding the imported breakdown of China and India,
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 they had a comparatively homogeneous starting point at around 2, they still had a difference in levels of growth.
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 there was a dramatic acceleration witnessed by the former to nearly 30, which not only reached its peak but
also
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 took over
Japan
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's leading position, the latter experienced unswerving constancy until 2000 before hiking to approximately 5 at the
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Export percentages
  • Significant trends
  • Sharp increase/decrease
  • Relative distribution
  • Global economic changes
  • Trade agreements
  • Shifts in demand
  • Market dynamics
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Bilateral trade relations
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