The global demand for oil and gas is increasing. Some believe that we should therefore encourage the exploitation of remote areas. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
In
this
rapid
changing world, whether the question Change the word
rapidly
encouraging
oil and gas exploration in remote Change preposition
of encouraging
areas
or not has sparked a significant debate. I think supplying this
demand from countryside
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the countryside
have
more advantages than its disadvantage.
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has
Firstly
, exploring oil and gases from remote area
means that it will improve Fix the agreement mistake
areas
economic
situation. Especially, in most remote Add an article
the economic
areas
, there are accounted for more poverty than bigger
cities, Change preposition
in bigger
hence
, authorities need to give permission to mining companies
to improve this
burden situation. Another supporting idea is that why we need to encourage this
kind of operation is the number increasement
of job Correct your spelling
increment
position
among the mining Fix the agreement mistake
positions
companies
, therefore
, local citizens can be employed. It supports to improve their lives according to
their earnings. For instance
, In Mongolia, mining workers earn highest
salary and their life situation Change the article
the highest
much
improved.
In terms of the disadvantages, environmental damage can be Add a missing verb
is much
issue
, and the natural resources will Add an article
an issue
be
decrease soon after the exploitation. Unnecessary verb
apply
However
, it can be true, but I believe that if the local authorities can make stronger agreement
on the activity of nature protection with mining Fix the agreement mistake
agreements
companies
, it would not be a big challenge. For example
, in France, there are many mining companies
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that runs
runs
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run
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the operation
operation
in the local Fix the agreement mistake
operations
areas
and they obliged
to establish green Add a missing verb
are obliged
areas
such
as botanic garden
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gardens
according to
their contract, which will be more benefitted
to their locals rather than unused resources.
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benefit
To conclude
, the advantages of exploring natural resources from local areas
, such
as economic growth and an increasement
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increase
of
job positions, outweigh Change preposition
in
than
its disadvantages. I believe that if the government can make Change preposition
apply
strong
code which can Correct article usage
a strong
be
cover all Unnecessary verb
apply
downsides
of mining exploration, it will not be Correct article usage
the downsides
big
issue.Add an article
a big
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...