In their advertising, buisness usually emphasize that their products are new in some ways. Why is this? Do you think its positive or negative development.

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advertising
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of consumers in many aspects.
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advertisements
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help them to get new technology,there is
also
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an argument that opposes it.
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my perspective,I consider that the government should implement
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strict
role for the companies to make sure no
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misinformations
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misinformation
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or fake
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features
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on their device.
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with,these days many companies manipulate and foster the consumers to
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purchase
new
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products
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even when they have the previous version to make more profits.
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,they illustrate to
people
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how the products make your lives more
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convenient
convenience
conveniences
such
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as
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iPhone
every
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year
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years
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year
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having
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have
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having
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a new
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new
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a new
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phone without any advanced technology but they work more to
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convince
people
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to have it.
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,most
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companies
using
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use
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Artificial intelligence to look
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at what
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they
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people
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searching for
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on
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browser
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browsers
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like
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google
and
then
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suggest
them
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the
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same product they looking for.
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,if you search on
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google for
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restaurent
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restaurants
google
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recommends
to
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that
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you like what you search to buy. Another point to consider business market has
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rapidly
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after the
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of technology that creative new
method
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methods
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to attract
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consumers in many
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such
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as
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the product and
buy
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buying
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later or
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your old gadget and
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taking
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it is possible to say that
this
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attitude
lead to bad consequences for
people
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and spending money to buy somthing unuseful.
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,
people
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who
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suffer
suffered
with
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from
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shopping addiction
who
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have a bad
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financial
situation.
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,
according to
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a recent study
people
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who listened to
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advertisements
they
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apply
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a
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tend to pay
something
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for something
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they
does
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not really
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need
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. In conclusion,despite
people
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having different views.I believe that it is crucial to the
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raising
public
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awareness
about
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bad behaviour to
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their money.
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