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Write an essay discussing two of these factors, Getting the right qualifications or having the right Contacts , lead to success in life in your notes. You should explain which factor is more important in achieving success, giving reasons to support your answer.

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Success is something that many
people
 aspire to achieve, but only
few
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managed
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 to succeed.
People
 have new
businesses
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 ideas with promising
future
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 on paper,
however
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 most of those will never develop any
further
. There are different factors that could increase the probability for some of them to be successful.
On
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this
essay
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 I will explore what could make a bigger impact in the way to success, if having the
right
qualification
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qualifications
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 or the
right
 contacts. Some
people
 would dispute that having the
right
 qualifications is the most important factor to
get
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 successful. Education can give individuals skills that will be used to become one of the best in their field. The latest studies show that postgraduates in a science degree have 10 times more chances to create and run their own business, than those who have completed a humanity qualification.
However
, having the
right
 contacts and knowing the
right
people
 can open a lot of doors and opportunities.
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 the current times, it is widely known that having an influential network is a must. I do believe that to be able to develop a good idea and to be able to put it into practice, you need support and advice from different professionals.
Therefore
, having the
right
 contact may be detrimental to
go
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 far in life. In
conclusion
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 not all talented and ambitious individuals would be able to step up and be successful in what they do.
Although
 having the
right
 qualifications may help in the process, I firmly believe that knowing the
right
people
 is key.
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Task Achievement
Your essay skillfully addresses the prompt, presenting a clear stance on the importance of qualifications and contacts in achieving success. To enhance your task response, integrate more varied and specific examples to substantiate your claims more comprehensively.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure of your essay is commendable, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Improve coherence by transitioning more smoothly between points and paragraphs. Use cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'In addition', and 'Consequently' to link ideas more explicitly.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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