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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee ad tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee ad tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates in percentages the frequency with which the Australian population drinks
coffee
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 and tea in 5 different
cities
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. In general, the population in all four
cities
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 has demonstrated throughout the data that they prefer to drink caffeine outside of their places of residence.
In addition
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, in the
last
Linking Words
 four
weeks
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weeks,
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 individuals have drunk more instant espresso than fresh.
Firstly
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, more than 50% of the population in
cities
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such
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 as Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane and Hobart had had
a
Correct article usage
apply
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coffee
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 or tea in a
coffee
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 shop in the
last
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 month.
Whereas
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, in Adeleine less than half of the community went out for caffeine or tea in the same time period.
Secondly
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, the community that took instant
coffee
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 in the
last
Linking Words
 month presented a significant fluctuation between
cities
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.
For example
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, three metropolises were below 50% of preferences, with only Brisbane and Hobart reaching more than half but less than 55%.
In addition
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, the lowest preferences were the same in all five
cities
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, which was fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
Linking Words
 month, with some metropolises achieving less than 35% of total preferences. Translated with DeepL.com (free version)
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, last".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee consumption
  • tea consumption
  • shopping habits
  • demographic factors
  • preference trends
  • price sensitivity
  • convenience
  • per capita
  • restaurateurs
  • beverage industry
  • consumer behavior
  • market analysis
  • quantitative data
  • qualitative analysis
  • trend analysis
  • urban vs. rural consumption
  • seasonal variations
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