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The table below shows how young people in Tokyo , Japan, listened to music over the previous month. the pei chart shows a record company international finding about whethwe people preferred live or recorded music. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relavant.

The table below shows how young people in Tokyo , Japan, listened to music over the previous month. the pei chart shows a record company international finding about whethwe people preferred live or recorded music. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relavant.
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The given table illustrates the different methods individuals used in Tokyo , Japan, to listen to
music
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 during the
last
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 month , and the pie chart depicts
finding
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the finding
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 of a record company, in foreign countries on preference for live or recorded
music
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.
Overall
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, the largest number of individuals in Tokyo used to listen to
music
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 via live
music
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 and
mp3
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MP3
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 players over CDs
while
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 in foreign countries people loved to
hear
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listen
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 to live
music
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 the most compared to recorded. In detail,the highest number of 79% of males in Tokyo have preferred mp3 players as the method to listen to
music
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 during the
last
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 month ,
whereas
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 the largest number
of
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apply
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44% of females utilized live
music
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 to enjoy songs and tunes.
However
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, both males and females have used CDs
in
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apply
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the least amount of times 19% and 22% to listen to
music
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.
In addition
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, an overwhelming majority of 70% of foreign individuals had
listened
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listened to
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 live
music
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while
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 a modest just more than
one fourth
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one-fourth
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 had listened to recorded
music
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, and a minority of 4% posted in the don't know category in the record company's findings.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words music with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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