Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. What are the reasons behind this view? What are the solutions to change it?

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nation
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economy. With the support of
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,
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the country
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annual revenue increases which
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can spend on building
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is not good for
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because effects on
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environment of
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the nation
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nation
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heritage properties.
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, some people
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that
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has
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worse
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the country
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country
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natural environment
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more usage of automatics which increase
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pollution.
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tourists are using more
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for transportation which is
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way to explore the state but it
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the
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air pollution and
effecting
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air quality and
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it is so hard to
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in poor quality
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air.
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habitat of
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the nation
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people
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effects
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affected
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.
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are
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damage
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country
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property
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as
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the country
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country
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traditional heritage.
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, in
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Amritsar
(Punjab) one
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the paint on
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the sculpture
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of Uadam Singh. That's
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people
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thinks
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tourist
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damage
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their
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culture
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heritage. Moving forward, every problem has
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solution
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as making some
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and
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more public transportation for
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tourists
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.
Government
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needs to set the target
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to visit the
country
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as well as
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they need to make some
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guideline
guidelines
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tourist
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cannot spoil or
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the
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religious things and if they do there should
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penalty on it.
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,
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need to start some public
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for
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famous places so they can use more which will help to reduce
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pollution
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save the natural environment.
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making
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some
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and
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and starting
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more public transportation is helpful for saving the
nation
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from
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because
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the tourist
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tourist
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is helpful for
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the nations
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nations
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economy
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Environmental impact
  • Over-tourism
  • Pollution
  • Natural habitats
  • Cultural erosion
  • Economic dependency
  • Resource strain
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Eco-friendly practices
  • Cultural heritage
  • Infrastructure
  • Diversification
  • Empowerment
  • Awareness programs
  • Visitor limits
  • Off-peak tourism
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