Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Defination
of happiness varies from person to person opinion. Correct your spelling
Definition
While
few people opine that the
childhood is the most enjoyable part of Correct article usage
apply
life
, others believes
adulthood is the prime Change the verb form
believe
time
of life
. In my perspective, children have the most spare time
and less
responsibilities, so they would be those enjoying their Change the quantifier
fewer
life
at full potential. This
essay will discuss both opinions before reaching a concrete decision.
Firstly
, preponents
of adolescent age advocate for the Correct your spelling
proponents
tension free
and least reponsible Add a hyphen
tension-free
lifestlyle
it offers. Mostly, teenagers do not have to deal with any serious situations that require them to make hard Correct your spelling
lifestyle
decisions
or have a very crucial responsibilities
on their shoulders. Correct the article-noun agreement
a very crucial responsibility
very crucial responsibilities
Secondly
, Children have free time
which they usually spends
socializing in schools, parks and other places. Change the verb form
spend
Moreover
, they get more quality time
to spend with friends and family as compared to their parents leading to a stress-free and joyful life
. For instance
, we can observe more number of teenagers hanging out with thier
friends.
Correct your spelling
their
On the other hand
, people thinks
the best Correct subject-verb agreement
think
time
to enjoy life
is adulthood cite
Wrong verb form
citing
the
freedom and more opportunities as the topmost benefits. Correct article usage
apply
Grown ups
have full authority to make Add a hyphen
Grown-ups
decisions
related to any perspective of life
. Niether
Correct your spelling
Neither
they
have to rely on someone to make Add a missing verb
do they
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
decisions
a decision
decisions
nor they are required to ask for anyone's permission. For instance
, adult people can make any decisions
without even asking for thier
Correct your spelling
their
parents
permission. Another point worth considering is the number of opportunities adulthood serves. There are many things that are considered dangerous to children but are normal for adults. To illustrate, Change noun form
parent's
parents'
a
adult can enjoy the thrill skydiving offers where minors are not allowed.
Change the article
an
To conclude
, grown up
can enjoy Correct your spelling
grown-ups
independent
lifestyle and have access to great opportunities. Childhood brings more joy in Add an article
an independent
life
due to
omnipresence
of quality Correct article usage
the omnipresence
time
that can be enjoyed freely and less
responsibilities to deal with.Change the quantifier
fewer
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