The charts show the Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school.
The charts show the statistics of Australian
school
leavers' career path after graduating from secondary school
.
The information was provided for 3 specific years which are 1980, 1990 and 2000. There are three different types of what those ex-students did instead
of studying in high school
. The red section presents those who were employed. Meanwhile, the blue and green parts represent the portion of the unemployed group and people who continued further
education respectively.
In those three years, the majority of school
leavers were employed and it's portion came with an increasing trend starting from 40% in 1980 raised up to 55% in 2000. This
is caused by changes in businesses' recruitment criteria which allow and offer opportunities to whoever has knowledge and is capable of their job. A degree from a university was not required anymore. On the other hand
, the further
education portion decreased constantly from 50% to 37%. Lastly
, the unemployed group had the smallest numbers and it fluctuated during the period.Submitted by Punpun on
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