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The graph below shows the reasons why businesses use socil media and the size of the businesses. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features

The graph below shows the reasons why businesses use socil media and the size of the businesses. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features
The graph illustrates the different reasons why
businesses
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 use social media and the size of
businesses
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that using social media for developing
business
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image
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 or market products was prevalent,
while
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 the proportion for involving customers in development or innovation was the least. The highest rate can be seen in
businesses
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 which have over a thousand
employees
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 who utilized it for developing
business
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image
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 or market products
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at just under 70%,
whereas
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 it stood
last
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 for the ones with 10-49
employees
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 with 30%. Responding to customer opinions, reviews or questions is the next most popular ground for
businesses
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 with similar patterns to developing
business
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image
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, where the figure 1000+
employees
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 was at nearly 60% compared to about 20% for 10-49
employees
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. The percentage for 250-999
employees
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 was relatively lower among others in using social platforms for involving customers in development or innovation, at just over 10%.
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, the figure for collaborating with
business
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 partners or organizations is slightly higher in each
business
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 size, by around 1%. The ratio for 50-249
employees
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 in recruiting
employees
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 was standing middle among others with nearly 18%,
while
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businesses
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 with all
employees
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 contributed to only about 10%. Exchange views, opinions or knowledge was the third most popular reason, where
businesse
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businesses
business
 with all
employees
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 and 250-999
employees
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 were relatively higher than
other
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the other
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 3 reasons except developing
business
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image
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 or market products and responding to customer opinions, reviews or questions, at approximately 18% and 31% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words businesses, business, image, employees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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