Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination while other think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Appearance

and

money

are regarded as a crucial part of success,

while

there

are

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some

oppostion

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opposition

concern

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concerns

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that determination and

hardwork

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hard work

are way

more

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better.

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writer is choosing the sides of

hardwork

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hard work

and

passion

and

give

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some evidence

to

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this

.

Money

and

appearance

,

which

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are important to a successful career or

work

, as they offer the opportunity

on

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for

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jobs and wealth. With

the

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a

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nice

appearance

,

people

can gain the first impression in interviews so that they get more attention and

chance

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to be hired, and, if

people

do have

money

, loads of

money

, they

don

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do

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not have to worry about

lacking

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of profits. With these states,

people

can

involve

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involved

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in lots of

work

and jobs which require

a huge advantages

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huge advantages

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from

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these

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apply

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.

For example

, if you are handsome and have

alots

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lots

a lot

of

money

, you can be a singer. Turning to

the

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apply

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passion

and

hardwork

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hard work

, which come in both, and

be

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being

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concerned by

people

as

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apply

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an important states of

sucess

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success

.

With out

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Without

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the

hardwork

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hard work

and dedication,

people

can not have

motivation

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the motivation

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to

work

on their trip to success, they can not even gain experience because they show no interest in what they are doing.

This

consquence

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consequence

in

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is

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that

the

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apply

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passion

and

hardwork

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hard work

are very important for

such

success.

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Pagani

for example

, a very determined

business

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businessman

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man

finding

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found

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his own car company and

be

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is

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refered

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referred

revered

as

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to as

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the most famous car dealer and maker in the world for his dedication and passionate process. Taking all

point

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points

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into account,

money

and

appearance

which

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are important to a successful career or

work

but above

of

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apply

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that

is

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apply

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passion

and

hardwork

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hard work

are a crucial part of

sucess

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success

as it gives

people

the motivation

in

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to

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work

for sure.