The line graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan.

The line graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan.
The line graph illustrates the change
of
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monthly
price
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prices
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in
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three metals in 2014.
Overall
, the
percentages
of copper,
nickel
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and nickel
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decrease
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significantly in the given period,
while
zinc
increase
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significantly. On the one hand, the price of nickel started at 6% in January and fell down to the lowest point in June at -3%. Afterwards, the
percentages
rose to 1% and
constant
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before decreasing slightly
at
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-2% in October. Nickel reached
peak
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point at 1% in November
and
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. Copper started the year at 2% and decreased slightly around -1% in May. After that, the price declined
at
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1% in July before constant until September. The
percentages
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of copper reached
peak
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more
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at 1/% in December after decreasing slightly in October.
On the other hand
, zinc prices started from 1% in January and
increase
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dramatically
at
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3% before
fell
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down to -1% in June, which was the lowest point of zinc. Afterwards, prices increase slightly approximately at -1% in July and constant until September.
Moreover
, the
percentages
decline to -1% before rising
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2% in December.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • volatility
  • stabilize
  • significant fluctuation
  • peak prices
  • trough (lowest price point)
  • gradual increase/decrease
  • sharp rise/drop
  • overlapping trends
  • average monthly change
  • price movement
  • observe
  • compare
  • conclude
  • data representation
  • identify
  • supporting figures
  • timeframe
  • general observation
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