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Band 5.5

What do you think what is the main effects of climate change? Which solutions can be useful?

In the light of globalized world,
the
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climate
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change
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pave
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 the way for adverse and irreversible ramifications including global warming, increase
of
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 sea level, loss of biodiversity and fertile lands, extreme weather patterns and depletion of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer. In
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climate
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 and provide practical solutions to mitigate the problem. One of the severe implications of
climate
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 is global warming , which
result
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increase
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an increase
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of
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 sea
level
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as well as
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expansion
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 of areas of droughts.
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, the undesirable rise
on
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 temperature not only
accelerate
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 the process of melting of ice but
also
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carry out
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the
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disastrous impacts
for
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 specific animal species which live
on
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the arctic
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arctic
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Arctic
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 region. Depletion of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer can be considered the other serious repercussion of
climate
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,
that
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affect
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 the health and well-being of all living species including humans negatively. Depletion of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer
let
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lets
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 the harmful shine of
sun
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to
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contact our skin and affect our health directly. It is important that action is taken to solve those issues and provide
sustainable
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the sustainable
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 world. First and foremost,
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public awareness should promoted in order to take advantage of all other solutions efficiently. In
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 case, reinforcement and strict regulation by
government
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the government
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 can help to tackle
easily
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. Following that countries, especially
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 consist
immense
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of immense
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 industrial and business
centers
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 can switch to
the
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alternative energy and avoid from pointless overusing of natural resources.
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, the techniques for recycling and reusing should be advanced,
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, it will lead to
protect
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 energy sources
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 the development of cheaper and
effective
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more effective
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 methods.
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, the
climate
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 issue and its noxious impacts are burgeoning day by day, but taking the right steps immediately can alleviate
this
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 problem.

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Introduction & Conclusion
Ensure that your introduction clearly introduces the topic and outlines the main points to be discussed. Your conclusion should summarise your arguments effectively.
Cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices appropriately to link your ideas together. Avoid overuse or underuse. This includes linking words, paragraphing, and cohesive phrases.
Logical Structure
Make sure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the supporting sentences are directly relevant to this main idea.
Complete Response
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Relevant and Specific Examples
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