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The charts below show that percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show that percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate an analysis of a comparison of average shares from various nutrients that were consumed on a daily basis by the USA citizens. What stands out from the diagrams is the consumption of
sodium
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 and saturated fat during
a
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the
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 day was almost similar. Those nutrients were taken mostly in the
dinner
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,
while
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 added sugar was eaten as snacks
mostly
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apply
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. As mentioned, the use of
sodium
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 and saturated fat was the highest in the
dinner
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, accounting for 43% and 37%, respectively. These products went less like snacks, to be more precise,
sodium
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, ranking
last
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 with 14%, at the same time the percentage of saturated fat is higher, with 21%.
Furthermore
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, nutrients
such
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 as
sodium
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 and saturated fat were used mainly, after
dinner
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 time, and at lunch, respectively 29% and 26%. Shifting the focus to the consumption of added sugar,
it is clear that
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 it is used mostly as
snack
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a snack
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. Compering with others it was not demanded in the
dinner
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. The consumption of the three products was similar during breakfast, with between 14% and 16%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, dinner with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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