You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter, say which part-time course you booked explain why you need to cancel your booking ask about booking a different course
Dear Sir
The purpose of inscribing
this
missive is to cancel the booking of my Business
management
course, in which I am enrolled as a part-time student in the evening session of your college at the Toronto campus.
I inclined
to shift my interest Add a missing verb
am inclined
in
International Change preposition
to
Business
Management
topic because I reckon that it is more
demanding stream in today's Add an article
a more
the more
fast paced
environment. Add a hyphen
fast-paced
Moreover
, I want to pursue my career as a Business
Analyst, so getting enrolled in International
Correct article usage
an International
Business
Management
instead
of Business
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a Business
management
courseCapitalize word
Management
,
will open new opportunities Remove the comma
apply
of
Change preposition
for
an
employment for me. Remove the article
apply
However
, I came to know that I have to burn mid night
oil in order to secure an internship Correct your spelling
midnight
at the end
of term but I am ready to face all the difficulties for my future.
I want the administration to cancel my booking in the Business
Management
Course and give me admission in Internation
Correct your spelling
International
Business
Management
as a full-time student, along with
the transfer of my fees to this
subject.
Sorry for the inconvenience in advance. I will wait for the confirmation of enrollment from college
.
Yours Faithfully
RamCorrect article usage
the college
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Task Response
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines the purpose of your letter. While your introduction does mention the intent to cancel a booking, consider directly stating the course name and your student details (if applicable) for clearer context.
Task Response
To enhance task response, it's crucial to explicitly address all parts of the prompt. You've mentioned the course you want to cancel and provided reasons for doing so, but consider adding more specific queries about the process of enrolling in a different course, including any deadlines or financial considerations.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter demonstrates a good structure, moving logically from introduction, to the reason for cancellation, to requesting enrolment in a new course. To improve coherence, link your paragraphs more seamlessly by using transitional phrases that guide the reader through your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
While your letter has a clear greeting and closing, using a more formal closure (e.g., 'Yours sincerely' for known recipients or 'Yours faithfully' for unknown recipients) would better suit the formality of the context.