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You recently took a long vacation. In your absence, a friend did you a huge favor.

#vacation #absence #friend #favor
Dear Chappu, I hope everything is going well for you. First of all, I truly want to express my gratitude for the support you provided
with
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 resolving the
bank
 fraud
happened
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that happened
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with
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 me
while
 I was out of
the
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town
for
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the
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Vacation. I understand that you
spend
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 a lot of your precious time
in
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explaining the situation to the
bank
 representative, and I am very grateful to you for that. As you know I don’t share my online banking password
to
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 anyone, but out of
nowhere
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 someone got access
of
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 my
bank
 accounts.
Consequently
, all the money
got
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 withdrawn from my account within seconds. As soon as I came to know about it, I called you and requested you to visit my home branch to find out what exactly happened. If you hadn’t reached
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the
bank
 that day, I would have lost all my money. Since you helped me in
this
 tough situation where it was totally impossible for me to do anything without your support, I want to give
something
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 in return. I know it will never compensate for what you did, but I would like to request you accept my small gift as a good gesture. I have decided to take you for dinner at your favourite restaurant
this
 Saturday and I hope you will like it. Looking forward to seeing you at the restaurant at 7 PM. Lots of love, Aayush
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Introduction Improvement
Expand on your introduction to clearly set the context of your gratitude towards your friend. Include a brief overview of the favor done.
Structural Improvement
Enhance the logical structure by organizing your ideas more clearly. Use paragraphs effectively, dedicating each to a specific aspect of the event (e.g., the problem, the solution, the outcome, and the expression of gratitude).
Conclusion Enhancement
Make sure to conclude your letter with a clear closing statement or paragraph that not only expresses gratitude but also looks forward to future interactions or how you intend to continue your appreciation.
Detailing and Examples Improvement
Include more detailed examples or descriptions of your feelings and actions to make your gratitude more vivid and personal. This adds to the coherence of your letter by creating a stronger narrative flow.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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