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The chart below shows information about wages for healthcare professionals in four different countries.

The chart below shows information about wages for healthcare professionals in four different countries.
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The given table illustrates data regarding how much money employees who work in hospitals gain on average per
month
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 in four different parts of the world,namely,
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Country
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 A,B,C and D.
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,what stands out from the graph is that in areas where professionals come from abroad,the amount of wage is higher than that in source countries. Looking into detail,nurses and doctors in
country
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 A obtain the least amount of money per
month
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(35 and 64
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dollar
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 respectively) and
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in
other destination
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another destination country
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country
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,
wage
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the wage
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 for doctors is twice as much as that for nurses(700 and 350
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dollar
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 respectively). With regard to the countries where health care workers come from other parts of the world,there is little
differencr
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difference
 in the amount of money per
month
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 for nurses(almost 3000
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dollar
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).
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 in the former ,doctors receive 5500
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for
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each
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,
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 number in
country
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 D is higher significantly($ 10200)
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words month, country, dollar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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