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The graph below shows UK air pollutants in millions of tons, from three different sources, between 1990 and 2005.

The graph below shows UK air pollutants in millions of tons, from three different sources, between 1990 and 2005.
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The chart compares millions of tons of
air
pollutants
 in the UK from three various sources between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
, it is noticeable that three types of
air
pollutants
; industry, total
air
pollutants
, and
households
, are far from stable
overtime
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.
Nevertheless
,
according to
 the line graph, the rate of
transport
stay
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stays
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 steady over the period of 15
years
. First of all, it is clearly seen that
,
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 The numbers of industries and total
air
pollutants
 saw an approximately negligible amount of decline throughout the course of three
years
.
However
, The quantities of
transport
 and
households
keep
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remained
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 unchanged between 1993 and 1996. Following six
years
 (1993–1999), we can see that, the figures
of
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for
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industry
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the industry
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, total
air
pollutants
 and
households
,
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 faced plummet.
Although
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, the amount of
transport
 level off at
overtime
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over
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.
Secondly
, Turning to the next
years
 (1999-2005), as
line
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 graph illustrates, before the number of total
air
pollutants
go
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went
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 down in 2005, it remained
only
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 3
years
, more precisely in 2002. If we look at the numbers of industry and
households
, they dropped by around 50% to 1-3 million tons, cases. The amount of
transport
 remained its number as always, More accurately, its rate was estimated at approximately
nearly
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1-2 million tons during
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the
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quindecennial
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollutants, households, transport, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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