Some people think that dancing is an important subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. What are positive and negative sides of art at school? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience or knowledge. Write about 180-220 words.
others think it is a waste of time. I think dancing is most important for
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Dancing
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On the
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hand dancing is important in
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and with special music.
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think dancing
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. if they exercise every day there are
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in the world from different festivals and dancing shows. In my opinion
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museums. If
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people can draw
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beautifully
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Conclusion
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Expand your essay by discussing both the positive and negative aspects of the question in a balanced way. Include specific examples or experiences to support your points.
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Engagement with topic
You've shown an inclination to present an opinion and engage with the topic, which is a positive start.
Passion for topic
Your enthusiasm for the subject of art and its importance shines through, demonstrating personal investment in the topic.
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