Some people think that dancing is an important subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. What are positive and negative sides of art at school? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience or knowledge. Write about 180-220 words.
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the lifestyle
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Coherence & Cohesion
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Task Achievement
Expand your essay by discussing both the positive and negative aspects of the question in a balanced way. Include specific examples or experiences to support your points.
Coherence & Cohesion
Make sure your essay is fully complete by including a conclusion that summarises your main points and restates your opinion. A conclusion helps to round off the essay and provides closure for the reader.
General
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Engagement with topic
You've shown an inclination to present an opinion and engage with the topic, which is a positive start.
Passion for topic
Your enthusiasm for the subject of art and its importance shines through, demonstrating personal investment in the topic.
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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