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These days the majority of employers require good social
skills
. While
these social skills
could improve employee management and bring effective networking, these could
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skills
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the organisation
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Thus
, the importance of having social skills
is required more nowadays.
On the opposite, having only social skills
does not mean that this
employee is qualified. There are more skills
that determine an efficient worker such
as problem-solving skills
, decision making and research skills
. For example
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Therefore
, good qualification for job success is not determined by only social skills
.
In conclusion, while
social skills
could bring benefits like social networking and engaging management, it is not enough for job success.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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