The charts below show what uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008
The charts illustrate
number
of graduate and postgraduate Change the article
a number
the number
students
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of
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in
UK
who finished college in 2008 and Correct article usage
the UK
then
did part-time, volunteering, Linking Words
further
study and unemployment Linking Words
instead
of attempting full-time Linking Words
work
.
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Overall
, when Linking Words
compared
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comparing
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the numbers
numbers
of postgraduate Fix the agreement mistake
number
students
was nowhere near as large as graduate Use synonyms
students
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, Linking Words
although
for collegiate Linking Words
students
, part-time Use synonyms
work
was the most popular and Use synonyms
it
accounted Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
highest rate, it was less by approximately 1000 than the lowest amount of degree holder Change preposition
for the
students
who did voluntary Use synonyms
work
.
Let's see the details, for the first chart, most Use synonyms
students
chose Use synonyms
further
study which considered almost all graduate Linking Words
students
. Use synonyms
However
, Linking Words
difference
between the greatest Add an article
the difference
work
and the slightest Use synonyms
work
was very huge and it was highly likely Use synonyms
with
unemployment and could not show big unsimilarity.
For the second chart, short-term Change preposition
to
work
was not quite as large as Use synonyms
further
study even though both were the biggest indicators. 1625 postgraduate Linking Words
students
included joblessness which was third the greatest sector, controversly, volunteering Use synonyms
work
could not involve a range of postgraduate Use synonyms
students
because it was only 345 Use synonyms
students
.Use synonyms
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