The charts below show what uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

The charts below show what uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008
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The charts illustrate
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of graduate and postgraduate
students
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of
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UK
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who finished college in 2008 and
then
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did part-time, volunteering,
further
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study and unemployment
instead
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of attempting full-time
work
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.
Overall
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, when
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both charts,
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the numbers
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numbers
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of postgraduate
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was nowhere near as large as graduate
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.
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,
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for collegiate
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, part-time
work
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was the most popular and
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accounted
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highest rate, it was less by approximately 1000 than the lowest amount of degree holder
students
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who did voluntary
work
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. Let's see the details, for the first chart, most
students
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chose
further
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study which considered almost all graduate
students
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.
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,
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between the greatest
work
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and the slightest
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was very huge and it was highly likely
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unemployment and could not show big unsimilarity. For the second chart, short-term
work
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was not quite as large as
further
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study even though both were the biggest indicators. 1625 postgraduate
students
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included joblessness which was third the greatest sector, controversly, volunteering
work
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could not involve a range of postgraduate
students
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because it was only 345
students
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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