The charts below show what uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

The charts below show what uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008
The charts illustrate
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of graduate and postgraduate
students
of
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UK
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the UK
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who finished college in 2008 and
then
did part-time, volunteering,
further
study and unemployment
instead
of attempting full-time
work
.
Overall
, when
compared
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both charts,
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the numbers
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number
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of postgraduate
students
was nowhere near as large as graduate
students
.
Moreover
,
although
for collegiate
students
, part-time
work
was the most popular and
it
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accounted
the
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highest rate, it was less by approximately 1000 than the lowest amount of degree holder
students
who did voluntary
work
. Let's see the details, for the first chart, most
students
chose
further
study which considered almost all graduate
students
.
However
,
difference
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the difference
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between the greatest
work
and the slightest
work
was very huge and it was highly likely
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unemployment and could not show big unsimilarity. For the second chart, short-term
work
was not quite as large as
further
study even though both were the biggest indicators. 1625 postgraduate
students
included joblessness which was third the greatest sector, controversly, volunteering
work
could not involve a range of postgraduate
students
because it was only 345
students
.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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