The charts below show what uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008
The charts illustrate
number
of graduate and postgraduate Change the article
a number
the number
students
of
Change preposition
in
UK
who finished college in 2008 and Correct article usage
the UK
then
did part-time, volunteering, further
study and unemployment instead
of attempting full-time work
.
Overall
, when compared
both charts, Wrong verb form
comparing
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the numbers
numbers
of postgraduate Fix the agreement mistake
number
students
was nowhere near as large as graduate students
. Moreover
, although
for collegiate students
, part-time work
was the most popular and it
accounted Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
highest rate, it was less by approximately 1000 than the lowest amount of degree holder Change preposition
for the
students
who did voluntary work
.
Let's see the details, for the first chart, most students
chose further
study which considered almost all graduate students
. However
, difference
between the greatest Add an article
the difference
work
and the slightest work
was very huge and it was highly likely with
unemployment and could not show big unsimilarity.
For the second chart, short-term Change preposition
to
work
was not quite as large as further
study even though both were the biggest indicators. 1625 postgraduate students
included joblessness which was third the greatest sector, controversly, volunteering work
could not involve a range of postgraduate students
because it was only 345 students
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