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Research show that business meetings discussions and training are happening online nowsdays.Do the advantage outweigh the disadvantages?

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In current days ,
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organisation
meetings
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 and teachings are now done virtually and there are merits and demerits of using online platforms
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 as it is easy and quick to conduct a meeting , it hinders some of the ideas and practical skills if needed irrespectively.
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 virtual
meetings
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, it is fast and quick to hold a meeting and they give room for a quite number of people to join
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 they give every member an opportunity to participate unlike physical
meetings
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 they are limited
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 various reasons
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 as venue , some individuals they might be out of the city .
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 it is remarkable to use electronic gadgets in
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. Decisions are made quickly since everyone is required to give their own opinions instantly .
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 it is not time-consuming compared to physical
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 it requires a lot of hierarchy for
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.
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, virtual
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 have some drawbacks
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 as , training usually requires physical practice
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, it is difficult for one to put into practice.
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, sometimes the call may be distracted by the network . In my own opinion , the advantages of holding business
meetings
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 and training online outweigh the disadvantages of doing it physically to a greater extent
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 that online
meetings
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 are quick and easy to conduct rather than face-to-face.
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coherence cohesion
Strive for variety in sentence structures to keep your writing dynamic and engaging.
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Integrating more variety in vocabulary can help enhance the expressiveness and sophistication of your arguments.
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Ensure a balance between the advantages and disadvantages discussed to fully explore the complexity of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Effectively introduced and concluded the essay, providing a clear overview and closing statement.
task achievement
Successfully outlined both the advantages and disadvantages of online business meetings, demonstrating a comprehensive understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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