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research shows that business meetings, discussions and training are happening online nowadays. do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#research #business #meetings #discussions
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easier than before. Current findings suggest that more
bussiness related
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business-related
 talks, meet-ups and teachings happen virtually. The below essay will elaborate
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 and demerits of the above notion. On one hand,
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online gatherings in business
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that shareholders or workers can do wherever they might be without travelling which saves time and money at the same time.
Furthermore
, it is cheaper as there would be no rental fees and refreshments involved in conducting
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 of that day.
Additionally
, it is good for the environment as it
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 fuel
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pollution
 from those who might be going to the gathering. Meetings can be recorded and kept in
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 without any inconvenience and it can
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accommodate
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individuals
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 without an expensive venue.
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 meetings about 1000 people can join and it eliminates
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 of diseases .
On the other hand
, there are quite a number of negative effects
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 power shortages which will now require additional
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 to make it for the meeting.
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 in the transport industry as they would have gained by transporting those people to the venue.
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body language or reactions especially if it is not
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 call. In conclusion, it is evident that the positives are more than
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 , as advantages
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 no hustle for
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, less financial strain, being good for the environment, accommodating a large number of members at once and
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 the comfort of their own homes just to mention a few.
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
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general
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task achievement
Your essay does a great job of outlining both the advantages and disadvantages of online business meetings, effectively balancing both sides of the argument.
coherence cohesion
You have an effective introduction and conclusion, which clearly state your opinion and succinctly summarize your main points.
coherence cohesion
The essay's structure makes it easy to follow, with a logical flow from one idea to the next. This greatly aids in the overall coherence and cohesion of your piece.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual collaboration
  • teleconferencing
  • webinar
  • remote access
  • cost efficiency
  • cultural diversity
  • interactive platform
  • networking opportunity
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • cybersecurity
  • encryption
  • bandwidth
  • digital divide
  • screen fatigue
  • team cohesion
  • asynchronous communication
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